Welcome to WRT 104's Peer Review WIKI. Below you will see a sample of an essay that I have looked over and asked one question and changed a problem in formatting. King begins his letter by showing his authority on the subject. He proves his legitimacy by stating his position held in the church—since he is writing in response to eight clergymen. By doing this, he finds a common ground on which he can relate to the audience. King says he has “the honor of serving as president of the Southern Christian Leadership Conference, an organization operating in every southern state" (King 1). By doing this, he shows to the clergymen that he is a man in God’s service, and has God’s will in mind. King proceeds to make points that are grounded in the Bible. He claims his extremist ways are sound by comparing his ways to those of Jesus Christ. “Was not Jesus an extremist for love: ‘Love your enemies, bless them that curse you, do good to them that hate you, and pray for them which despitefully use you, and persecute you" (King 1). King uses another important tactic in his letter—criticizing the church. Throughout the letter, King attempts to legitimize himself with the church, only to claim his disappointment with the actions of the white church. He says, “In deep disappointment I have wept over the laxity of the church.” He claims that the church hasn’t been giving the proper attention to the true injustice of segregation.
What technique does he use to do this? This should be mentioned in your topic sentence of the paragraph. King has a strong belief that laws are not meant to hurt or degrade people, but to protect them. He says the segregation laws protect absolutely nobody, yet they do much damage. “All segregation statutes are unjust because segregation distorts the soul and damages the personality. It gives the segregator a false sense of superiority and the segregated a false sense of inferiority. (MLK 1)” King says. He creates such a powerful argument due to the surplus of reasonable evidence he displays. He also says that he has no problem in breaking laws that are unjust. “…One has a moral responsibility to disobey unjust laws. I would agree with St. Augustine that, an unjust law is no law at all " (King 1).
Now - By changing the color of my own text, I can add suggestions right within the text to help this student meet the criteria of a rhetorical analysis. I can also change color and size and font to make my suggestions stand out. Once I am done sticking in anything I like into the text - like I did above - I will write a note about my edit below - like edited by D. Feole on 2/25/09, and then save.
King begins his letter by showing his authority on the subject. He proves his legitimacy by stating his position held in the church—since he is writing in response to eight clergymen. By doing this, he finds a common ground on which he can relate to the audience. King says he has “the honor of serving as president of the Southern Christian Leadership Conference, an organization operating in every southern state" (King 1). By doing this, he shows to the clergymen that he is a man in God’s service, and has God’s will in mind. King proceeds to make points that are grounded in the Bible. He claims his extremist ways are sound by comparing his ways to those of Jesus Christ. “Was not Jesus an extremist for love: ‘Love your enemies, bless them that curse you, do good to them that hate you, and pray for them which despitefully use you, and persecute you" (King 1). King uses another important tactic in his letter—criticizing the church. Throughout the letter, King attempts to legitimize himself with the church, only to claim his disappointment with the actions of the white church. He says, “In deep disappointment I have wept over the laxity of the church.” He claims that the church hasn’t been giving the proper attention to the true injustice of segregation.
What technique does he use to do this? This should be mentioned in your topic sentence of the paragraph. King has a strong belief that laws are not meant to hurt or degrade people, but to protect them. He says the segregation laws protect absolutely nobody, yet they do much damage. “All segregation statutes are unjust because segregation distorts the soul and damages the personality. It gives the segregator a false sense of superiority and the segregated a false sense of inferiority. (MLK 1)” King says. He creates such a powerful argument due to the surplus of reasonable evidence he displays. He also says that he has no problem in breaking laws that are unjust. “…One has a moral responsibility to disobey unjust laws. I would agree with St. Augustine that, an unjust law is no law at all " (King 1).
Now - By changing the color of my own text, I can add suggestions right within the text to help this student meet the criteria of a rhetorical analysis. I can also change color and size and font to make my suggestions stand out. Once I am done sticking in anything I like into the text - like I did above - I will write a note about my edit below - like edited by D. Feole on 2/25/09, and then save.